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Academic Writing Part 2: Writing Concisely and Avoiding Passive Structures - Shared screen with speaker view
Kristina Forman
19:49
I don't hear any audio but I see the slides changing, so I just wanted to check if there's supposed to be audio
Cassandra Schelldorf
20:10
I don't hear it either
Amanda Catron (she/her)
20:10
There is no audio currently
Cassandra Schelldorf
20:26
OK, thanks!
Amanda Catron (she/her)
20:32
This is just our opening slideshow so you can see more resources we offer in the OGPD!
Amanda Catron (she/her)
28:30
https://gradadvance.graduateschool.ufl.edu/programs/workshop-series/
Amanda Catron (she/her)
28:34
https://gradadvance.graduateschool.ufl.edu/programs/workshop-series/
Amanda Catron (she/her)
29:19
A recording of this workshop and the worksheet will be available on our website within 24 hours. Here's the link: https://gradadvance.graduateschool.ufl.edu/programs/workshop-series/
Frances Melgarejo
32:42
Can you send the document being shown?
Frances Melgarejo
32:51
It is not the one already in the chat.
Amanda Catron (she/her)
33:14
Hi Frances! You can find the previous workshop recording and materials on our website: https://gradadvance.graduateschool.ufl.edu/programs/workshop-series/
Frances Melgarejo
33:25
Ah, ok. Thank you!
Amanda Catron (she/her)
34:47
Here is Dr. Simpson's worksheet again (download the file from the Zoom chat)
Caleb Bowyer
41:13
Is the 4-5 sentence model for paragraph structure outdated or still common wisdom in writing circles?
Amanda Catron (she/her)
41:36
I've got your question Caleb!
Daniel Vilas
42:28
Is it possible to get this document?
Amanda Catron (she/her)
42:35
For those that arrived late here is Dr. Simpson's worksheet (download the file from the Zoom chat)
Daniel Vilas
42:52
thanks, Amanda
Amanda Catron (she/her)
42:58
Of course!
Bana Kabalan
44:12
Is there a book you can recommend on reducing micro wordiness and fixing grammar? English is not my first language and I find issue in making strong sentences with distinct clauses.
Caleb Bowyer
44:38
Bedford handbook is great.
Caleb Bowyer
44:52
For rhetoric and grammar
Amanda Catron (she/her)
45:29
I've got your question Bana!
Bana Kabalan
45:39
Thank you!
Juliana Santiago
50:25
I have a question: writing academically (specially in social science) I noted citations of previous works are a key part of our papers. However, sometimes we have read before A LOT to come to some of our own assessment of data. I always struggle if I should firstly write my thoughts and later seek for the grounded theory, or the opposite way.
Amanda Catron (she/her)
50:55
Hi Juliana! I've got your question
Amanda Catron (she/her)
51:06
Also, next week's workshop is on citations too! :)
Juliana Santiago
51:08
Thanks Amanda
Christine Swanson
53:12
Why do many K-12 teachers teach us that we should use passive voice for professional/scientific writing? Where is that disconnect coming from?
Amanda Catron (she/her)
54:00
Hi Chirstine! I think that's a great question. I'll collect it. I'm not sure how much he knows about K-12 curriculum currently as he works at a University, but I'll include it
Christine Swanson
54:24
Thank you!
Crispin Beyogle
54:49
Exactly @Christine Swanson. I was taught to write in the passive voice as much as possible in academic writing. His answer will do us a great deal of good.
Kalina Atanasova
55:02
I have also been taught to always use passive in scientific articles. Not in K12 grade, but in "scientific writing" classes...
Michelle Joyce
56:01
As a HS science teacher (in a previous life) I intentionally taught students to write that way!
Amanda Catron (she/her)
56:02
The passive structure can be used in specific situations. I'm sure he'll go over it and if not we'll ask!
Amanda Catron (she/her)
56:36
HEY!
Amanda Catron (she/her)
56:39
There it is! :)
Kalina Atanasova
56:40
We've also been taught not to use me, mine, I, but us, ours, we...
Amanda Catron (she/her)
57:59
Hi Kaline! If I'm not wrong, the use of me/mine/I vs. us/ours/we is discipline specific
Kalina Atanasova
58:35
Yes, science - by a group of scientists...
Amanda Catron (she/her)
01:01:05
Here's the worksheet again! :)
Michelle Joyce
01:01:17
Coming from another country, we were taught to write science lab reports in the third person
Richard Yudin
01:01:39
Same with me
Hamzah Ahmed
01:03:09
Can you correct the last sentence?
Amanda Catron (she/her)
01:04:10
Hi Hamzah! I've got your question! Can you specify the sentence?
Caleb Bowyer
01:04:12
Seems like a run on sentence too.
Amanda Catron (she/her)
01:04:55
Please feel free to submit your comments in the chat. I will collect them for Dr. Simpson.
Amanda Catron (she/her)
01:05:04
And questions!
Hamzah Ahmed
01:07:17
This is the sentence "In that course, there was discussion but no comprehension of the material".
Amanda Catron (she/her)
01:07:31
Thanks Hamzah! Got it
Huan Gao
01:08:45
A clarification question: in the lit review, use active structure to show who did what; and in the research design, we can use passive structure since people know it is the author who do the research? Thank you!
Amanda Catron (she/her)
01:10:05
I got it Huan! :)
Huan Gao
01:10:38
Thank you, Amanda~
IZUCHUKWU EZUKANMA
01:11:50
I think I will benefitI if I get to review more examples of the passive voice. Is there any textbook , preferably in UF library, that you may recommend we can read further to see more examples of passive vs active voice?
Amanda Catron (she/her)
01:12:09
Got it!
Amanda Catron (she/her)
01:13:12
A recording of this workshop and the worksheet will be available on our website within 24 hours. Here's the link: https://gradadvance.graduateschool.ufl.edu/programs/workshop-series/
Khairul Siddiqi
01:14:00
Yeah, that's why I found almost all authors write method section in passive!!
Leanne Dumeny
01:15:52
Do you have advice for adding variety in writing lit reviews? So that all sentences don't look like "Jackson et al found that xyz"
Amanda Catron (she/her)
01:16:12
Hi Leanne! I've got it! The HSCL offers lit review workshops too!
Bridget Ellis
01:17:10
Thank you! Great answer!
Hamzah Ahmed
01:19:03
Great answer!
Amanda Catron (she/her)
01:19:09
Thank you for coming to our workshop today! We would appreciate it if you could take 2-3 minutes to complete our survey to help us with future programming! Here's the link: https://ufl.qualtrics.com/jfe/form/SV_87WOpQAogayKJAp
Minor Cushion
01:19:16
Can you speak on hanging gerunds?
Marina Sessim
01:20:10
Do you have any book recommendations to improve our scientific communication?
Amanda Catron (she/her)
01:20:38
Hi Minor! Check out the writing studio's tutors for specific grammar questions like this. You can schedule here: https://tutortrac.clas.ufl.edu/
Huan Gao
01:20:56
so next week is workshop in lit review? I remember that is about citation. Are they the same? @ Amanda
Minor Cushion
01:21:17
Thanks!
Amanda Catron (she/her)
01:21:21
Hi Huan! No, next week's workshop is on citations and preventing plagiarism
Amanda Catron (she/her)
01:21:38
You can find workshops on literature review topics at the Health Science Center Library
Amanda Catron (she/her)
01:21:55
Here's the link: https://ufl.libcal.com/calendar/HSCLWorkshops/?cid=11693&t=d&d=0000-00-00&cal=11693&inc=0
Huan Gao
01:22:01
I got it. Thank you Amanda!
Amanda Catron (she/her)
01:22:04
:)
Shaimaa Elbalkiny
01:22:13
excellent!
Amanda Catron (she/her)
01:22:20
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Chie Ishii
01:22:34
Thank you!
Andris Ernstsons
01:22:42
Thank you, I found this talk very useful
Amanda Catron (she/her)
01:22:43
A recording of this workshop and the worksheet will be available on our website within 24 hours. Here's the link: https://gradadvance.graduateschool.ufl.edu/programs/workshop-series/
Christine Swanson
01:22:46
Thank you!
Mandy Baily
01:22:47
Thank you, this was very helpful!
Jacqueline Aenlle
01:22:50
Thank you! This was great.
Mayra Rivas
01:22:51
Thanks!!
Bana Kabalan
01:22:54
Thanks!!!
Frances Melgarejo
01:22:55
Thank you!
Vania Pereira
01:22:56
Thank you
Hamzah Ahmed
01:22:56
Thank you !
Yi Yuan
01:22:59
Thank you so much!!!!
Chendi Ma
01:23:01
thank you
Widyastri Rahmy
01:23:04
Thank you!
Huan Gao
01:23:06
Thank you
Amanda Catron (she/her)
01:23:29
A recording of this workshop and the worksheet will be available on our website within 24 hours. Here's the link: https://gradadvance.graduateschool.ufl.edu/programs/workshop-series/